Print Tutorial: Learner's Response

Daisy-Leigh

Learner response on Statement of Intent feedback: Posted.

New Statement of Intent draft submitted: Submitted – but not yet marked (sorry!) Although it may be worth adding a section on this print planning and re-submitting (agree word count may be an issue).

Print planning discussion: Absolutely superb – already planned with sketches looking great.

On track to meet deadline: Yes.

Next steps:

·     Identify three things you need to work on in the next 10 days.

- Complete the Research and Planning log task

- Write the analysis for the double spread feature

- Take on location shots for my contents page

·   Date for Statement of Intent submission: Monday 9th December (Negotiating! Need to see if word count will be an issue)

Statement of Intent: Learner's Response

Feedback:

• This is a great concept with some absolutely superb discussion. The vast majority of the writing is in itself top-level but you are stuck on the level below due to the length (overlong) and lack of organisation and clarity.
• Perhaps use bullet points, subheadings or similar to organise your ideas into sections and also cut the word count? It’s just a massive lump of text currently!
• You need a brief summary at the beginning of the basics of your show – title, narrative summary/log line etc. You’ll have done this already on the TV drama pitch document.
• In the statement as a whole, you address the key concepts very impressively – language, representation and audience are all covered in detail. The issue is organisation and word count – could you divide into sections and perhaps use bullet points in places to cut the word count?
• One comment on audience – your initial discussions of audience do not feel like they meet the ‘family audience’ specification of the brief so perhaps look at this. I think you need to make the family element clearer both in terms of how your concept matches the genre and also the family target audience.
• You are missing one element in the statement of intent mark scheme – digital convergence. You need to cut down rather than add but could you add something about using social media to develop some of the issues you discuss?
• Culture magazine planning is excellent but perhaps needs organising into one section? However, it is fine to make references to it in other areas of the statement.

Three Improvements

• Lower the word count- cut out parts that are irrelevant
• Restructure! Add subtitles and bullet point key aspects
• Add a few sentences concerning digital convergence - Youtube, #'s, Spotify

Pre-Production Tasks

Mise-en-scene

• Costume

RIVER: blue, cool toned colours - androgynous style with clear 80s influence

FLEUR: Green/Natural colours, clear 90s supermodel influence, natural but atypical makeup choices

BELLE: Black/Pink colours, soft makeup choices with strong modern clothing choices- stark contrast from androgynous choices and feminine clothing

MONET: yellow, autumnal outfit choices, very artistically influenced style with feminist references throughout, statement pieces and warm coloured makeup

ANTAGONIST: all black, shapeless style that creates strong silhouettes with barely any notable brands.

• Lighting

NATURAL LIGHTING: Filming using natural light where possible to create realism, back lighting for ANTAGONIST scenes to add to the ambiguity of their character

COLOURED LIGHTING: using coloured lights for 'power shots' within the trailer, add to the Channel 4 drama brand and also the postmodern perspective for the show. 

• Props

RIVER: Umbrella, Laptop, Phone

FLEUR: Flowers, Notepad, Phone

BELLE: Lip gloss, Mirror, Phone

MONET: Paintbrush, Sketchbook, Phone

• Sound

DIAGETIC: Traffic, People talking in the background, Vinyl Playing music, Phone Calls

NON-DIAGETIC: Soundtrack[ New Heroes - TEN, River - Bishop Briggs, Bad Blood - Ministry]

Script
Shot List