Preliminary Task: Learner's Response

Type up your teacher's feedback in full plus a summary of the comments you received from other students in the class.

• Interesting camerawork throughout and creative editing (split screen) very 'C4 Drama'
• Speeding up people walking needs to be 'time-lapse' fast or nothing. Here, I don't know why you sped everything up- a slower pace to communicate the narrative surely would've worked?
• Freat font for title.
• Voiceover good but rushed!
• Audio levels were too loud
• Edit was too quick- should be slower
• Split Screen and ending shot communicated the genre and feel greatly.

Using a combination of your own reflection on the preliminary exercise and the feedback you were given, write three WWW bullet points and three EBI bullet points for your TV drama scene.

WWW:

• The font used, and overall feel of the trailer was extremely on brand for a Channel 4 drama.
• The voiceover was clear and had a lot of potential
• The characters looked their age, and the settings used fit the overall concept of the drama.

EBI:

• The audio levels matched- and were more appropriate
• The edit wasn't as rushed- take your time with editing and composition
• Timelapse speed for montage rather than only slightly sped up

How effectively did you complete the objective you laid out in your mini preliminary exercise statement of intent?

• The concept was clear, and the script was communicated well however the phone call was unclear and the overall timing was mismatched meaning some aspects of mise-en-scene and the overall scene idea were ignored or poorly executed.

What have you learned from the preliminary exercise that will help you in the actual coursework project?

• That I should edit my work slower than I perhaps may think- as well as keeping the C4 Drama brand obviously and noticeable throughout my production. I also think I need a wider variety of shots and to include a voiceover as well as a backing track may make the concept much clearer.

Now you have completed the preliminary exercise, will you change anything in your actual TV drama trailer? This could include narrative, character and script or technical elements such as mise-en-scene, camerawork and sound

• I think that overall I will keep my concept, however I will perhaps keep the ending shot and implement it into my trailer as well as highlighting character differences more explicitly within my camerawork and mise-en-scene choices. I feel as if the characters weren't recognisable and the static lighting made it difficult to communicate the post-modern feeling I aim to present with my actual trailer. I also will be conscious of audio levels, and ensuring that diagetic and non-diagetic sound flow together instead of being disjointed and amateurish.